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I Don't own
Shugo Chara. I wish I did, though.





Why are you
still with Tadase?
 The question
burned in my head. I liked him and he liked me, right? I don't get
why we don't make a good couple. Eh? Why is someone hitting my back?
Amu-tan,
math is starting. You might want to come back to this world. I recall
th
is is
your worst subject.”

It was Miku. I don't get why she would try and help me if she just
said something so devastating to me. “Himamori-san! Please
answer question nine!” Nikaidou-sensei called. Jeez. This stuff
is
impossible.
E
veryone
is staring at me. I was just about to confess I didn't know,
when
the bell rang. I have never been so relived to hear the bell ring in
my life. I have to get down to the guardians meeting. I have
something
VERY
IMPORTANT
to
talk to them about.






Miku's POV


They
are going to learn something new today. Something
very
important. Hopefully I can get it done before Ikuto starts wondering
where I am.
“Destiny,
Usachi! C'mon! We are going to meet the guardians today! Usachi, make
sure the kitty cat doesn't burst any spoilers. 'Kay?” “Sure.”
“ Good. Now let's go.





The
second I come in,
to
the big, glass building,

I see Yaya in my face. “YAYA WANT'S TO KNOW WHY MIKU THINKS
AMU-CHI AND TADASE DON'T GO TO
GETHER”
“T-Tsuki-san, Gomenasai, but only the guardians  can be here.
So I'm afraid you have to leave.”  Tadase stuttered. I guess
he's scared of what I said. What a king. “YEAH! THAT MEANS YAYA
WANTS YOU TO LEAVE!” “Oh, are you sure I won't become a
guardian?” I say with a smirk planted on my face. “Usachi,
come out first!”






Amu's
POV


She
has a chara? She does. Usachi. She is pretty. She has pale blue eyes
with a button nose, long blonde hair, bunny ears, and a cape that
covers her whole body.
“Next,
Destiny!” Miku calls. “Destiny, at your service~mew~!”
Destiny, a kitty cat, I should call
her. She has gray cat ears and a tail, wears a gray dress with a
cross
in the middle, has brown huge, sparkly
eyes, and a smile that nothing can resist.





Hinamori
Amu! Miku's Mo-” “Really Destiny! Of all things, you say
that! I really have to teach you.”





Hm...
I wonder what Destiny was going to say about me? Something important.






Miku's POV


Really?
Destiny should know better. Especially
THAT.
I have to get this done quickly. Ikuto's
probably
wondering.
“I
need to go soon.” I say. “I'll just finish this up.”





Here
is Amu's reason that Tadamu isn't a good couple. Amu fell in love
with Tadase's outer character, not who he really is. Tadase's reason
is because he only fell in love with one side of Amu. Amulet Heart.
He didn't fall in love with all of her. Not Amulet Spade, Amulet
Clover, or Amulet Diamond.


Questions,
everyone?” “Y-Yes!” Amu stutters blushing on nine
levels. There is only ONE person she can blush ten levels on. “H-How
did you know all of this?” I also figured this question was
going to pop up at some point. I have a perfect, simple answer for
this one. “I just do.” I say with a smirk.






Amu's POV


There
it is again. Ikuto's smirk. Why does Miku have to have the EXACT same
smirk as Ikuto.It makes me feel
depressed.





Eh?
Why does everyone who has paid attention to everything have a kinda
shocked look. Tadase-kun's   mouth is hung open, and Yaya seems to be
very focused about something (Which is very rare for Yaya, BTW.), and
Miku's face along with her actions told everybody
distinctly,
DO. NOT. SAY. A. WORD. OR. ELSE. I heard a few footsteps and then
everything went black.
Could
I be blind? No, I didn't do anything. This feels kinda weird.

“Guess who.” A soft voice said. Was it Ikuto? I guess I
kinda lost it and yelled. “I DON'T CARE WHO THE HECK YOU ARE!!!
JUST GET THE HECK OFF OF MY FACE!!!”  
I
guess
the
person obeyed, because a few seconds later, I saw light.





Geez.
You still ARE a troublesome princess.” The voice said. But I
think I have a pretty good idea of who it is. Ikuto. Mainly because I
could see
neko
ears. “Ikuto, I know your here, now, tell me why.”I said,
trying to sound irritated. “Aww, am I not allowed to see
Amu?
Ikuto said, pouting playfully.






Miku's POV


Heh.
NOW Amu is blushing on ten levels. Good Ikuto. “W-Why are you
really here, Ikuto? You can see me anytime! Why now?” Amu
asked, clearly flustered. “Fine. If you REALLY want to know,
I've come to scold. Ikuto said walking toward in my direction.

Oh dang, I am late, aren't I?

Ikuto
finally
stopped
walking when he was right next to me.





Ikuto
looked down at me and said “I thought you said you weren't
going to be late.” Okay. I have to turn into my arguing mode...
okay. Arguing mode ready. I turn around and say stubbornly “Can't
we talk about this later?” “No. I want to talk now.”
Ikuto said with a smirk, then he put his face so close to mine our
noses were almost touching.
Okay, there
is no point in backing out now. Wait! Yes there is! Sayonara!
“Okay,
I have thought of my argument.” I protested. “Sayonara,
Peoples!”






Amu's POV


Miku
just hopped away... jeez, what a coward.

“I have to get Miku.” Ikuto said. He started to leave
when a
VERY
IMPORTANT
question
hit me. “Ikuto! Wait!” I yelled. He stopped and said
“What,
Amu?”
“What is your relationship with Miku?”

Hi! Sry there are no charas! He He he. Gotta love cliffhangers.
I don't really know what to write. Um... I would really appreciate feedback?
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This is a very nice story, and I personally like it! I just have a few pointers.

There are some great stories out there that only use said, but you should use different words! Make it interesting. Mumbled, muttered, whispered! You could used "said nonchalantly" or "said absentmindedly." It just helps to give the impression of how the character is talking.

When someone new starts talking, start a different line. It's hard to follow when you have multiple characters all taking in one paragraph.

Again, love this story! I think it has a lot of potential! Hope I helped somewhat!
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x-Infinity-x Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Wow! A great surprise! Love it<3
I notice you love to use 'said', i recommend you to use all sorts of other words like 'ask', 'demanded', 'mumble' etc. instead of just using 'said', the story will be much more emotional!
Also my one-shot is out! I would like you to give me some feedback also! Thx^^ [link]
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